Quite decent, it lacks some drive though.
At first I was going to write that the percussion in the start was off, since it has an usual time structure, but after listening to it a few times it starts to fit more. What really helps is when the kick comes in, that gives the track some more power.
I'm not at all a fan of the strange bass that comes in around 0:15. It sounds so lo-fi and distorted in a bad way. Think I recognize the preset from somewhere aswell. ~.~ But nevermind that if you didn't use a preset, hehe. :P
I think you should remove the bass. Instead, have a slightly distorted bass and add some sinewaved subbass for the feel together with the 4x4 kicks.
Good use of Rig's samplepack, though I'm not really a fan of the scraping cardboard sounds. ._. But that's my taste I suppose.
7.4/10
4/5
Pretty nice outcome for a quickie. ;) If you're planning on continuing with this track, I would suggest that you throw in some more percussion that's panned all over the place when the melody comes in. The percussion as it is right now is just *slightly* lacking.
~ La_Yinn, --'